Post by demoderby on Oct 27, 2009 5:47:29 GMT 8
This happens to be a story that I've posted on Shurtugal.com (The older part of the site.) And thought I had failed to attract any attention. Recently, (Like in the past day...) there have been several requests for updates on it and I've decided to post my story here.
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Proluge
"Don't worry m'lady, she will be safe with me." said a poor looking woman as she accepted a squirming bundle from a cloaked figure. "I won't Diana, she is with you after all."responded Selena as she bit back her tears and comforted the boy that was clutching her hand and crying. Then without another word the two walked away, the boy looked back once and waved good bye to his sister.
After her mistress was out of sight Diana walked slowly home in near silence, although as she passed a cruel looking lord of the court who had a red sword strapped to his belt the servant whispered to the child in her arms. "You are safe Siena, I promise you this." The man didn't notice Diana, she was just another of the many slaves in his palace, dirt in his eyes. Sighing, Diana looked at the child in her arms again. The small girl was going to be quite pretty when she was older, that much was plain. Siena had curly black hair and bright blue eyes that showed curiousity for all that surrounded her, her skin was a clear cream color much like her mother's and the only mar in the infant's budding beauty was a small birthmark on her chin which was in the rough shape of a claw.
"Siena," whispered Diana again, smiling as the child began playing with a lock of her hair. "My child, you are safe."
When she reached her home, though it was more of hovel than anything else she was greeted by laughing children, all with black hair and tanned skin. "Mother, you're back, what kept you?" asked the oldest quizzically. "Lady Selena had a job for me Nirean we are to raise her daughter, Siena." responded Diana, showing her children Siena. "Our lord must not learn of her exsistence or Lady Selena will be most displeased." So Nirean placed Selena's daughter in a crib with another child and resumed her work sweeping the dirt floor. Siena watched from her place quietly and after a few minutes fell asleep.
Meanwhile Selena was comforting her son in a richly decorated room far above. "My child, Siena is safer with Diana, she would be treated cruelly here if your father knew of her, it is better that she is unknown and happy then known and sad."
"Will I see her?"
"I do not know, it is up to fate." but at that point a nurse came and took Murtagh away, so that Selena was left alone in her room.
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I'm open to any comments or suggestions, and welcome them all, good or bad.
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Proluge
"Don't worry m'lady, she will be safe with me." said a poor looking woman as she accepted a squirming bundle from a cloaked figure. "I won't Diana, she is with you after all."responded Selena as she bit back her tears and comforted the boy that was clutching her hand and crying. Then without another word the two walked away, the boy looked back once and waved good bye to his sister.
After her mistress was out of sight Diana walked slowly home in near silence, although as she passed a cruel looking lord of the court who had a red sword strapped to his belt the servant whispered to the child in her arms. "You are safe Siena, I promise you this." The man didn't notice Diana, she was just another of the many slaves in his palace, dirt in his eyes. Sighing, Diana looked at the child in her arms again. The small girl was going to be quite pretty when she was older, that much was plain. Siena had curly black hair and bright blue eyes that showed curiousity for all that surrounded her, her skin was a clear cream color much like her mother's and the only mar in the infant's budding beauty was a small birthmark on her chin which was in the rough shape of a claw.
"Siena," whispered Diana again, smiling as the child began playing with a lock of her hair. "My child, you are safe."
When she reached her home, though it was more of hovel than anything else she was greeted by laughing children, all with black hair and tanned skin. "Mother, you're back, what kept you?" asked the oldest quizzically. "Lady Selena had a job for me Nirean we are to raise her daughter, Siena." responded Diana, showing her children Siena. "Our lord must not learn of her exsistence or Lady Selena will be most displeased." So Nirean placed Selena's daughter in a crib with another child and resumed her work sweeping the dirt floor. Siena watched from her place quietly and after a few minutes fell asleep.
Meanwhile Selena was comforting her son in a richly decorated room far above. "My child, Siena is safer with Diana, she would be treated cruelly here if your father knew of her, it is better that she is unknown and happy then known and sad."
"Will I see her?"
"I do not know, it is up to fate." but at that point a nurse came and took Murtagh away, so that Selena was left alone in her room.
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I'm open to any comments or suggestions, and welcome them all, good or bad.